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Competition Showcase – The Promised Land by Fiona Atchison

 

The Scottish Association of Writers’ newest trophy is the Helen & Bob Orr Trophy, offered by Writers’ News. Bob and Helen were stalwart supporters of SAW and were also both contributors to Writing Magazine and Writers’ News. When they died within months of each other in 2006 we wanted to mark their involvement with a new trophy.
The competition is for a science fiction, fantasy or horror story up to 1,600 words and this years’ winner was Fiona Atchison, from Ayr Writers’ Group, in Ayrshire, Scotland.

The Promised Land

by Fiona Atchison



The new Senior Citizens sat in the optimum level of the Tutordome staring wonderingly down on the Circuit of workers. It was their first time back for many years. Some were fitter looking than others but that made no odds. The year count was the only measure that mattered. All citizens in that room had reached the statutory limit of 70 annum of productive activity. Now they attended lessons in preparation for their ‘Recreation Period’. The location for the recreation period was on the sunny side of the planet, called the Promised Land. Too hot and barren for productivity but ideal as everyone knew for pleasure. Viewcasts of the Promised Land were universally available. Andor had often watched images of happy smiling senior citizens, strolling hand in hand under a brilliant azure sky.
Turning his gaze from the darkened plastine, Andor worried what his life partner, Tala was doing. Probably in the process of decanting to a single bedded unit due to her new status. Of course nowadays people of differing annum would not be allowed to life partner, but 40 annum ago things were different. Then, Tala had been one of the available females within his Circuit and although 2 annum less than he, their partnership had been approved. It had been only a few days but he already missed Tala, deeply.
‘At least,’ he consoled himself, ‘I’ll be able to show her round the Promised Land once she joins me.’
The voice of Tutor Gogin suddenly interrupted his thought process.
‘Welcome Senior Citizens, or SC for short, as we say here.’ There was a ripple of excited laughter. For why would everyone not feel excitement? The ritual of leaving for the Promised Land was almost as old as time itself, or so it felt.
Tutor Gogin continued, ‘This, (a pause for effect) is the beginning of your Recreation Period, something you have worked all your lives for. You will remember your previous attendance here at Tutordome at 12 annum when you studied to prepare for work-life. Now, I wish to teach the meaning of a recreational existence. Your work-life is a thing of the past. Now you shall reap the rewards of input to your Circuits by joining your ancestors on the other side of the world.’
When Tutor Gogin finished his sentence, the wall him behind lit. Holographic images of Senior Citizens one after the other luminously appeared, smiling and waving before quickly evaporating. Andor as well as everyone else watched the joyous procession, and eagerly searched for relatives. The holographs appeared to be dressed in a silver high necked apparel which covered the whole form. Gone were the typical work suits like the one he currently wore.
A distressed shout from behind, took everyone’s attention as a woman forced herself to the front, ‘Mother, mother, it’s me, Caro!’ But the figure dissolved just as the woman reached out. Then the lights came up.
Tutor Gogin whispered into Caro’s ear and she smiled sheepishly whilst allowing herself to be led away by a female tutor.
‘As you must be aware that can often happen. But the images are holographic in nature only. You may meet up with loved ones soon, once this induction month is complete. And now, each of you must depart to the outfitting rooms. You are done with drab work suits.’
The month of learning had been somewhat strange in parts. There were private questionnaires to complete of a psychological and medical nature. Twice Andor had felt an urge to question Tutor Gogin following practical sessions. One lesson had covered exposure to the sun orb in the Promised Land and instruction in the process of re-hydration and skin repair.
‘Why would this happen, Tutor Gogin?’ Andor had asked. ‘ For in the viewcasts there is no mention of skin-burn.’
‘Merely for precaution’s sake’, came the response. ‘We at Tutordome wish you only to enjoy your recreation, but our task is also to prepare you for any possibilities however improbable they may be.’
The second question Andor asked concerned a lesson on food preparation. Where was the luscious fresh produce one had come to expect from viewcasts of the Promised Land? Instead here was Tutor Laylor combining dried powders of various hues with water. Although the finished results were quite tasty and edible, Andor’s curiosity prickled.
‘Tutor Gogin, is dried food in case of an improbable situation?’ he asked.
The sigh from Tutor Gogin’s large chest was audible.
‘Affirmative Andor. It is in the unlikely case of a flight-craft food delivery to the Promised Land being delayed. Dried foods could be a useful back-up.’
On the evening prior to their scheduled flight to the Promised Land, Andor heard a slight tap on his cubicle door.
‘May I enter, Andor?’ This whispered question came from the thin frame of the woman, Caro.
‘Yes, of course, is something wrong?’
Caro’s elderly eyes appeared frantic, ‘There is something I need to tell someone... and for some reason I thought of you. Perhaps because you asked questions.’
Andor sat Caro gently down on his bunk, ‘Go on.’ he said.
‘When Tutor Laylor took me to rest after the shock of seeing my mother in holograph, she left me alone for a while. I was in an office where I noticed a micro computer. In my Circuit I built micro computers but I had never encountered that model before. My curiosity was roused, so I engaged it with my wrist monitor and... and downloaded some files. It was only this morning I managed to configure them.’
There Caro stopped and hesitantly pressed the side of her wrist monitor and turned it towards Andor. After a moment or two Andor gasped.
The monitor displayed three separate lists. The first list named the 40 current Senior Citizens due to fly to the Promised Land. Not unusual in itself but aside each name was a projected life expectancy. Beside Andor’s name, 5 annum but beside Caro’s only 6 months. He scanned quickly down the second list. It detailed quantities of medical supplies, such as ‘radiation’ treatment drugs, and saline solutions. The final list included, parachutes, powdered foods, water barrels, heat retardant tents, clothing and light visors.
Andor met Caro’s fearful eyes, his own a mirror image as he finally managed to speak.
‘Is this then the ‘Promised Land’? A land where we are abandoned to survive death from a scorching sun?’ Andor stamped his fist, ‘No!’
Then a revelation, ‘Have all our ancestors been treated this way?’
Beside him Caro was softly weeping, ‘There is another file to show you.’
When dawn came without sleep, Andor went over his plan for the hundredth time. It was imperative to him, Tala would never have to face the same fate. He thanked the stars he still retained a muscular strength from working in the precious stone mines of Circuit 7. Caro also had her part to play and he was confident of her bravery. Neither of them after all had anything to lose but a hurtling drop onto a land of radiation.
In the vast flight hangar Andor sourced Caro amongst the excited Senior Citizens.
‘Is it time?’ she whispered.
He nodded his head. The live viewcast screening of their departure had begun. How many traditional farewells had he watched, including those of his parents and grandparents. Had they any inkling of what awaited them? Tutor Gogin, standing on a high gallery raised his arms for silence, to commence the official proceedings of embarkation. As he did so, he noted a small scuffle near the mounted Digicam and its operator being pushed roughly into the crowd by the man Andor. More alarmingly that frail woman Caro, appeared to be meddling with the equipment. He motioned his men to approach her from behind.
But suddenly the Digicam changed focus and a list of the Senior Citizens with their future life expectancies appeared. Then followed the medical and supply lists.
‘Citizens!’ the voice of Andor was clearly audible as a hush spread across the hangar. His voice simultaneously transmitted to the external viewcasts in the Circuits.
‘This is your ‘Promised Land’ and at that, images of emaciated and badly burned human forms glared over millions of viewcast screens. The uproar was tremendous in the hangar and Tutor Gogin’s men were brought to the ground as they approached Caro. Andor glanced at the Gallery. No sign of Gogin or Laylor. In the confusion they must have boarded the flight craft, as it was now taxiing to the runway. Andor made to run towards the hangar doors but was halted by Caro.
‘Let them leave! Computer coordinates take them only to the Promised Land and then the craft automatically returns to the hangar. They will have a simple choice Andor, to jump to the scorching surface or return here. Either way...’ She left the sentence unfinished.
Andor and Caro returned to their Circuits as heroes. In the weeks that followed, Government investigations into the Tutordome turned up records of around 50 annum ago, confirming high levels of radiation on the Promised Land. The inhabitants were perishing from radiation poisoning. The Tutordome not wishing to lose profit continued with ‘tradition’ in the full knowledge they were now sending Senior Citizens to a slow and painful death.
Rescue missions were sent for the remaining Senior Citizens on the Promised Land, and tutors of the Tutordome were tried then sentenced to death. Of Gogin and Laylor, nothing more was ever heard.